Can I get some help critiquing my classmates story? ?

Oct 17, 2008 by Ross | Posted in Books & Authors

I'm odd if the feedback that I've been giving my classmates is actually helpful. So, I brown study I'd submit one of their stories on YA! and see if you guys saw the same strengths and weaknesses as I did.

Thanks in assist. The assignment

My parody of this piece is that I see lots of passive description (sometimes repetitive) and very small-minded action.
Also, the dialog given out by the teacher seems singularly lacking in guiding or stimulating content, at least as used here.

This writing hints at an compelling story, the pregnancy, but spends so much time on

| Oct 17, 2008


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